BBC News grammatical triumphs
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Small independent firm the Welsh Whisky Company... The last commercial distillery, at Bala, north Wales, closed at the end of the 1800s. But the tradition is being revived with the launch of the malt on Wales' national day - 1 March. ... The Welsh Whisky Company employs 15 people who will produce 75,000 bottles of the whisky a year ... Other events to mark St David's Day across Wales include the firstr St David's Day Parade in Cardiff and a visit by Prince Charles to south Wales. The Cardiff march will begin at Sophia Gardens before ending at the National Museum of Wales in the city centre. A parade was also being held in Colwyn Bay, setting off at 0930 GMT from Lansdowne Road for a service at St Paul's Church. In New York the assembly government was opening its Wales International Centre - dubbed an economic "embassy" - in the Chrysler Building. ... In Colwyn Bay, Presiding Officer Dafydd Elis-Thomas was hosting a celebration at the assembly's new north Wales exhibition and visitor centre.
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"The Welsh Whisky Company" - capitalise The, it's part of the name. "North Wales" - capitalise North. The paragraph beginning "But the tradition" shouldn't even be in a new sentence, let alone in a new paragraph. 15 people producing a dark brown liquid.... hmmmm. And in bottles? Will they be laying bottles, like chickens do eggs? Should be "...Company, employing 15 people, will produce....whisky *each* year". "...include the first...". "A parade was also being held..."... but was cancelled in a protest over grammatical nonsense in online journalism? There should be a comma after "New York", although reporting an event that's evidently also been cancelled seems a little pointless. The quotes around "embassy" should probably be extended to "economic embassy". Got the comma right after Colwyn Bay, but North Wales should (again!) receive title case. Again with the past tense - he was hosting a celebration, but suddenly exploded on hearing this report? Finally, this is the second mention of Colwyn Bay, an "also" wouldn't be out of place somewhere here. Sometimes, I just despair.